Sunday Snippet-03/10/2013

Welcome! Today’s eight-sentence snippet is part of the Weekend Writing Warriors meme. Click that link for a complete list of participants.

I’m continuing with a bit from my current WIP. Childhood friends Matthias and Caroline (who both harbored deep crushes but never declared their feelings) are meeting for the first time in thirteen years. Matthias has a lot on his mind.

Matty — nobody else called him that. Not ever. The affection in her voice sliced at his resolve to keep her at arm’s length. Memories of the other times she’d used the nickname floated to the surface. Always innocently, but so damn sweetly. Had things gone differently back then, she wouldn’t be waiting tables in this shithole today. She’d be living like a queen. His queen.

That’s it for now. Have a great day, and thanks for stopping by. 🙂

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Sunday Snippet-03/10/2013 — 11 Comments

  1. Great snippet. I love the voice and way you worded his thoughts. The only thing you might consider is changing ‘sweetly’ to ‘sweet’ I think it comes off a great deal stronger. But try it out for yourself and see if you like it.
    Thank you for sharing I really enjoyed the read.
    ~Summer
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